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Closer and closer to bathtime madness!
Feb. 18th, 2011 11:41 pmIn the meantime, a completely unrelated paragraph about Hakkai. (It's almost a drabble, even, depending on if you're being really strict and saying a drabble is a hundred words, no more, no less.) It's kind of word vomit-y, but I like it anyway.
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He thinks if he cleans hard enough, cleans long enough, until the skin of his knuckles is scrubbed away and he can see his reflection in the paved stone kitchen floor that maybe, just maybe, he can turn back time and she'll come walking in the front door and they'll be happy in their little house, together again. And he knows it's probably a sign of insanity to think such a thing, but he can't stop hoping. Even though what he's really doing is penance when he scrubs his hands raw with harsh soap and his back aches and his knees have gone numb as he kneels with the floor brush, even though it's really her blood he washes away. It comes back, dripping on the floors, sprayed on the walls. Painted on his hands. So he cleans. And cleans. And cleans.
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I've got a little more to do (read: actually put in the actual bathing part) before bathtime-fun-my-fair-lady-gojyo will be ready for its debut. I'm thinking it'll be done as early as tomorrow afternoon/evening.
~later
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He thinks if he cleans hard enough, cleans long enough, until the skin of his knuckles is scrubbed away and he can see his reflection in the paved stone kitchen floor that maybe, just maybe, he can turn back time and she'll come walking in the front door and they'll be happy in their little house, together again. And he knows it's probably a sign of insanity to think such a thing, but he can't stop hoping. Even though what he's really doing is penance when he scrubs his hands raw with harsh soap and his back aches and his knees have gone numb as he kneels with the floor brush, even though it's really her blood he washes away. It comes back, dripping on the floors, sprayed on the walls. Painted on his hands. So he cleans. And cleans. And cleans.
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I've got a little more to do (read: actually put in the actual bathing part) before bathtime-fun-my-fair-lady-gojyo will be ready for its debut. I'm thinking it'll be done as early as tomorrow afternoon/evening.
~later
Ponder, ponder, ponder....
Mar. 20th, 2010 10:47 pmOkay, so I spent a little while today writing a ballad. Yeah. A ballad. An actual ballad....(It's not done yet, but soon I shall have a full rough draft of it. ^_^) Ballads are awesome vehicles for narrative, really they are. But it isn't an ordinary ballad, in my opinion. I've been listening to sea chanties a lot lately, to help with the mood for the mer-Gojyo Saiyuki story which continues to eat my brains. So I've tried to incorporate some of the stylistic elements of sea chanties into the ballad. (Namely, chanties tend to repeat phrases/lines because they're made to go with repetitive work...and also because that makes them easy to remember/sing.)
The part I am in a quandary about is where/if to stick it in with the rest of the story. Is it too ridiculous to break from normal chapters to put in what is, technically, a poem? (If I could compose music to suit it, I totally would. As it stands, it is music-less.) Should I just have it hanging around as a sort of bonus? Is anyone even interested in reading this utter crack?
If I were to put it in with the rest of the chapters, I have a couple of choices as to where it might fit. I'm reluctant to talk about where it might fit in in detail, just because I haven't posted the chapters it could go with, but basically...I'm looking at before certain chapters versus after them. If you had your druthers, would you choose to read the backstory on a character sooner or later? (Not that I'm not going to cover the backstory in the regular prose narrative...) Can I get away with sticking this poem about a character's past in before the character is even properly introduced in the story?
....okay. I give. I'll put in just the smidgingest smidgen of the ballad. It doesn't really spoil anything, especially when you consider that, historically, ballads tend to contain only a partial or skewed truth (assuming they're documenting a real event at all.)
Chin Yisou was a foolish man,
a foolish man was he.
He hurt Cho Gonou's dear Kanaan
and fled across the sea.
Decisions, decisions. Also, I have no idea if I'm going to be doing more ballads or not. Would it be weird to have four or five chapters of story, then a ballad, and then more story followed by another ballad? Not that I see a lot of writing that mixes them both together at all. Truthfully, the only instance I can think of at the moment is Jane Yolen's Great Alta saga--"Sister Light, Sister Dark"; "White Jenna"; and "The One-Armed Queen." (Awesome books, by the by.)
Augh. Brains spinning with ideas! Maybe I'll work on it some more...
~ciao
The part I am in a quandary about is where/if to stick it in with the rest of the story. Is it too ridiculous to break from normal chapters to put in what is, technically, a poem? (If I could compose music to suit it, I totally would. As it stands, it is music-less.) Should I just have it hanging around as a sort of bonus? Is anyone even interested in reading this utter crack?
If I were to put it in with the rest of the chapters, I have a couple of choices as to where it might fit. I'm reluctant to talk about where it might fit in in detail, just because I haven't posted the chapters it could go with, but basically...I'm looking at before certain chapters versus after them. If you had your druthers, would you choose to read the backstory on a character sooner or later? (Not that I'm not going to cover the backstory in the regular prose narrative...) Can I get away with sticking this poem about a character's past in before the character is even properly introduced in the story?
....okay. I give. I'll put in just the smidgingest smidgen of the ballad. It doesn't really spoil anything, especially when you consider that, historically, ballads tend to contain only a partial or skewed truth (assuming they're documenting a real event at all.)
Chin Yisou was a foolish man,
a foolish man was he.
He hurt Cho Gonou's dear Kanaan
and fled across the sea.
Decisions, decisions. Also, I have no idea if I'm going to be doing more ballads or not. Would it be weird to have four or five chapters of story, then a ballad, and then more story followed by another ballad? Not that I see a lot of writing that mixes them both together at all. Truthfully, the only instance I can think of at the moment is Jane Yolen's Great Alta saga--"Sister Light, Sister Dark"; "White Jenna"; and "The One-Armed Queen." (Awesome books, by the by.)
Augh. Brains spinning with ideas! Maybe I'll work on it some more...
~ciao
